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Not sure who told you intercuts are ONLY for phone conversation, but they are wrong. That is just how they are most often used.

However, after you establish two locations with master scene headings, you can use subheadings to jump between locations. Check out this page that shows an example of subheadings used to show continuous action. The example you are looking for is towards the bottom of the page:

http://scripttoolbox.com/subheadings/continuous.html

Also, here is an intercut sequence (but it is a phone conversation):

http://scripttoolbox.com/special/intercut.html

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It'll explain how spacing should work.

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David Trottier is a great source, but most script gurus, when trying to show an example of an intercut, will default to showing it used in a telephone conversation because that it where they are usually found. But Intercuts may be used in a variety of scenes.

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Personally, I'd have an attorney look at it, but that is just me.

You shouldn't be purposely rewriting dialogue for the sole purpose of avoiding MOREs and (CONT'D)s. After all, that is the one situation where (CONT'D)s are still expected.

But I gotta agree with Blacka: if MOREs are adding significantly to your page count, then it sounds like your script may be a bit Dialogue heavy and your Dialogue blocks a bit lengthy, which means your Dialogue needs rewriting for other reasons.

Often the answer to needing to add or subtract pages is going back to your outline and reworking the story a little. It is possible your pacing is off.

Underlining sluglines is a growing trend, and usually used among working screenwriters...the key word there being WORKING. It isn't suggested for a new writer writing a spec script.

I have a friend who isn't a working writer, but he is good enough that he has an agent, and his agent lets him underline the slugs. But in that case it is the agent's call.

I don't like it personally. First, I think underlining special situations such as montages and flashbacks, etc. are potentially good ideas to make sure they stand out. But if you are underlining EVERY scene heading, they'll look like every other heading in the script.

If you are sending out a script with underlined headings, there is a good chance it wouldn't get tossed in the trash by any readers...but it might.

As far as bolding goes, trelby's software actually defaults to bolded scene headings (trelby.org, btw), which I find interesting. I have less a problem with this, but always advise new writers not to get too cocky. Just stick to the basics.

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I recently edited a screenplay that was also a lot like Avatar ... in that is was more than 150 pages. I wouldn't worry about it. You can't please everybody. There's nothing new under the sun, and what Hollywood really wants is to rehash what has worked in past. Sounds like you need to be shopping it around to potential buyers.