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I've Got Your Number

1940s film noir satire, as hard-boiled, cynical private detective Vic Winslow wallows within the sordid, sleazy world of blackmail, murder, corruption, mobsters, and pure evil, all focused upon a lovely femme fatale. (FINALIST: BEST ACTION/COMEDY/FANTASY SHORT SCRIPT - 2O23 LONELY WOLF INTERNATIONAL FILM FESTIVAL (LONDON)

COVERAGE - FILMMATIC SCREENPLAY COMPETITION 2020

This is the type of short that tells a very character-driven story. I love these types of intimate, personal stories because they pack in so much information on each page. Though the medium only allows the reader to understand Winslow so well, the writer manages to cram in so much minutia and character detail in so natural a way to paint a very vivid picture of a complete life. The snapshot we get here points to a rich history and a fully lived in the world. It’s easy to imagine the characters living their lives outside the pages we get in this short. The story we do get is powerful, direct, and packs a lot of staying power. This is thanks to instantly engaging characters, even as the premise and plot take their time to unfold.

Winslow really was the main draw for me in this script. Though I’m not normally one for constant voice-over, the writer presents the story in such a stylized cool way that I was completely on board. Winslow has that classic hardboiled detective sound that flirts with cliché, but I found it compelling. It was interesting just seeing the way he looks at the world through his dialogue. It made for compelling moment-to-moment fun even without the bombastic plot points. A distinct cast and twisting plot points are the calling cards of this script. There’s a lot of fun to be had with the concept, but it was the depth of the characters and their complex choices that impressed me. This is a script that doesn’t stray too far from classic noire conventions, but knows how to use them to maximal effect. I enjoyed the turns of the plot and the grit of the narrative. A good read all in all.

Script Excerpt
Written by:
Format:
Short Screenplay
Genres:
Budget:
Micro
Starring Roles For:
Jon Hamm

In the Vein Of:
THE NAKED GUN
PLAY IT AGAIN, SAM
Posted:
03/10/2018
Updated:
04/07/2024
Author Bio:
I've had representation in the past. Not currently represented. Optioned once. Non-WGA. Quarterfinalist RENO-TAHOE SCREENPLAY COMPETITION - SPRING 2021

Contest Results:
Filmmatic Comedy (Finalist, Season 4) [2019]
Austin Fest Film (Quarterfinalist) [2020]
Austin Comedy Short (Third Place, Best Dark Comedy Short Screen-) [2018]
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