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**************The REVIEWS are in on The SOMMELIER*********************
""The Sommelier" is a masterfully crafted screenplay that stands out with its unique setting and authentic scenarios stemming from the context of wine... the mystery aspect of the narrative is very compelling, and it is certainly a very entertaining screenplay... The ensemble of characters is well-developed when it comes to their dysfunctional dynamics and authentic demeanors that make them original characters. The competition of who should get the chateau between the three siblings is a strong example... The plot is bulletproof when it comes to its design... The use of subtext and subtle emotional responses to tell us what the characters are going through. Glances, gestures, and micro-actions, especially during the moments where Ronan doubts Arturo's motivation, are strong examples of masterfully crafted dialogue. Besides that, each character has a unique voice on the page that makes them distinctive, and little quirks within their demeanors tell us more about their personas. Seeing Roman worry during the exam is a crucial scene in this regard, and so are Nigel's reactions when Ronan reveals the wine tasting consists of fakes. Their sophisticated use of language and high proficiency levels also add great authenticity to their interactions and make the overall scenarios more believable... the story stands out before its successful predecessors and the current competitors within the category simply because of its authentic characters and the scenario with the wine. This increases its marketability significantly... The story is auspicious... the writer's knowledge of wine tasting, and drinking adds great value to the screenplay as they have created an immersive and believable fictional world."
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"Really enjoyed the Sommelier. It's a fun, horror adjacent little piece set in a fun world. It's a great idea and I think you'll have some luck on this one. It's a great job... CONCEPT: I like the concept a ton. The idea of a wine dynasty on a murder mystery is so much fun and you did a great job with the various generations.. PLOT: Nice work again. I liked it. I like the way you put it together... CHARACTERS: I think you did a great job. The big, bad Somm is a fun villain. My mind immediately went to slasher, but this is far classier than that... DIALOGUE: Nice work here... there were funny lines and things were clear. People had distinctive voices and you did a nice job... THEME: I don't know that you particularly need a theme, but the idea of revenge is so strong running through the piece I'll give you a 5. I hate that "Theme" is required because so many great films don't have one... I like this. It's well written and I think if you send it around you might have some luck. It's rare to read something good so I don't have much else to say. Keep up the good work."
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"I really enjoy a good murder mystery story! I love to revel in the juxtaposition of vicious and barbaric actions from affluent characters in the backdrop of high society that these stories so often tend to exist in. From classics like THE MALTESE FALCON (1941), MURDER ON THE ORIENT EXPRESS (1974), and CLUE (1985) to more modern successes like KNIVES OUT (2019). There's a lot that goes into making a murder mystery story work to which THE SOMMELIER has varied success... CONCEPT: I mentioned this above, but I want to repeat it here because it applies to this script as well. The brutality and vindictiveness of these characters' actions play such a great foil to how people perceive the microcosm of the wine world. People think of wineries and vineyards as upper-class, refined, and elegant, but this story really challenges those preconceptions right off the bat and doesn't let up for a second. No matter how hard the characters try to present this sophisticated front, they can't hide the venom dripping beneath. Tonally, combining this pulpy thriller with a dark family drama is a good pairing. That part of the concept really works for me. On top of that, I've personally always been super fascinated with wine connoisseurs and the study of winemaking. So, any time the characters were actually having in-depth discussions about wine, I was very interested in listening. I enjoyed all the wine talk... I also think you made great use of the winery setting. You established Sumner Estates as this gorgeous, sprawling vineyard with lush rolling hills. You were able to utilize so many different locations on the same property, which kept the story feeling fresh. From the Chateau to the catacombs to rows of the grove. Each location gave the story a different feel. I imagine watching this film would be visually stunning... CHARACTERS: You did a very good job ensuring your characters were properly motivated with goals that felt extremely important to them individually. At no point did I feel like the characters didn't care about what they were doing. Not only was everybody properly motivated, but I also felt like each character was constantly pursuing their goal, even to their own detriment at times. And to put the cherry on top, their goals were in conflict with each other. Kudos on all of that because you have a lot of characters and most of them feel very active... All these competing goals also generate a lot of character drama. These characters obviously don't get along with each other and they aren't shy in showing that. The story really benefitted from all of this drama because even when the characters needed to work together, we the audience, were prepared for them to stab each other in the back at any moment... Ronan has a great desperation about him, which makes him a good protagonist (and later a surprise antagonist) for this story. He feels competent, yet still like an underdog, which is a hard balance to strike, but it works... DIALOGUE: The way the characters talked was really consistent throughout. I felt like these characters all came from super affluent upbringings. They felt upper-class to me. But the characters that were supposed to be lower class had a different cadence, which was a good thing. To reiterate, I loved any time the characters were really discussing wine (which is a lot in this script)! You definitely seem like you either know what you're talking about, or that you've done your research... THEME: Some of the themes I was picking up on were things like betrayal, bloodlines, lineages, blood ties, wealth, and a struggle for power. For the most part, these are serious themes that give your story a SUCCESSION-type nastiness to it... There's one recurring motif that I really liked, and I think you can double down on it. Obviously, in a script called, THE SOMMELIER, wine plays a huge role in the story. These characters are obsessed with wine. They almost revere it in a spiritual way. Wine is their life, their livelihood, and also the death of (some of) them. Wine is an extremely versatile symbol. The dichotomy of wine is vast. Wine is both ancient and contemporary. It's debaucherous and classy. It's celebratory and mournful. Wine can represent so many different facets if highlighted in the right way at the right times. In Catholicism, wine is representative of the "Blood of Christ," and "blood of grapes." Also, there's a very vampiric way these characters behave. The way they leech off of each other is extremely predatory in a lot of ways. Your story uses wine as a function of the plot really well, but I think you could draw more of these parallels to what wine can represent symbolically for your characters to better enrich and deepen the themes of your story."
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"From the first glimpse, you seem to have great writing ability... I enjoy your dialogue so much. I also enjoy how you introduce your characters... this is a brilliant script for those who like this specific genre. You've done a great effort and you are a very good writer"
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Overall, I initially thought that it felt a little bit like Clue meets Sideways, which is a good thing... I think the setting and visuals that you have can be done nicely and keep the story contained. The vineyard, the cellars, the caves, etc. are all pretty cool."
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"Overall: The action scenes were well-realized, and there were a lot of them. They all made sense within the plot and used the tools at hand (wine bottles, etc.) to good effect... I really, really loved the wine-tasting test... Setting: I really liked the idea of setting an intrigue like this in a winemaking operation and vineyard. Setting worked well with the plot... Enjoyed the nod to Poe, both in the introduction and the flashback cellar scene with the bells."
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BREFNI O'ROURKE is a New York based screenwriter actively marketing all of his materials for possible sale or option. He is the author of more than 50 original feature-length spec screenplays, primarily within the action, suspense-thriller, and horror genres. The "cinematic Brefniverse" includes:
"The Awning", a supernatural thriller, was a quarterfinalist in the 2023 WeScreenplay Feature contests. It was named a finalist in the 2022 Story Pros International Screenplay Contest and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 6% of discoverable projects. In March of 2023 it made the Red List as the # 8 ranked thriller screenplay.
"Wake", a psychological thriller, was recognized as a semifinalist in the 2022 Creative World Awards. It was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the Final Draft/Big Break Contest (top 10% of entries) and the American Zoetrope contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 22% of discoverable projects.
"Descendancy", an action-thriller, was recognized as a Quarterfinalist in the Script Lab - TSL Free Screenplay Contest 2022 and has been awarded a Coverfly badge of - Top 18% of discoverable projects.
"Moving Day", a supernatural thriller, was recognized as a quarterfinalist in the 2015 Final Draft/Big Break Contest. It has been awarded a Coverfly badge of being among the top 34% of discoverable projects.
"Panopticon", an action-thriller, was selected as a "Notable Project" by Amazon Studios (one of only 50 projects recognized as such).
"God's Work", a supernatural action thriller was optioned by The Ferla Consulting Group.
"Threshold", a horror-thriller (cowritten with Elizabeth Rowin and Greg DeRochie) was optioned by Contribution Films. (http://www.contributionfilms.com/threshold.html).
Read his novels on Amazon Kindle! https://www.amazon.com/author/brefniorourke
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