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Comanche Carl

An officer in the Dublin Garda avenges his son’s murder at the hands of a drug dealer with two legendary tomahawks once used by his great grandfather, a fierce Comanche warrior, then lays his badge on the dealer’s body and walks off into the night to become the underworld’s most feared assassin against their own.

Sergeant Carl Nevada, a half-American Indian, half-Irishman in Dublin’s Garda buries his son after his murder at the hands of a drug dealer. The dealer’s arrest is short lived after witnesses to the crime are found dead and the dealer is released. Carl’s rage releases his ancestor’s Indian fury as he ends the dealer’s life along with his cohorts on a Dublin street as they work their trade. Carl’s brutal assault is carried out armed with only a Bowie knife and two tomahawks of legend pass down through Comanche generations. After the attack Carl lays his badge on the dealer’s body and walks off into the night becoming the underworld’s most feared assassin against their own. The years pass with Carl now known throughout Europe as “Comanche Carl” the underworld’s most feared assassin. Carl’s code is to never take an innocent life or one of law enforcement and to never use a firearm in his paid for hire hits. Wounded and trying to escape from police after a messy hit Carl comes face to face with his estranged daughter who was ripped away from him by a cheating wife and divorce. Carl’s daughter, Casey, now a Garda herself is taken by Carl to his mountain hideaway where a rekindling of their father, daughter, relationship begins. With his daughter back Carl’s rage eases and his thoughts change to a new life, but a crime lord gets word of Carl’s habit of keeping a record of all his hits and the names of those who hired him from a close friend of Carl who’s his contact with the underworld. Fearful that Carl could betray him one day a hit is ordered on Carl’s life. When the assault is over Carl is left for dead and Casey kidnapped to the crime lord’s Dublin mansion. Badly wounded but driven by the fire within him Carl makes his way to the mansion armed with only his cutlery to save his daughter giving Dublin its morning headline describing the war that took place at the gangster’s mansion as “straight out of the movies.”

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Format:
Screenplay
Budget:
Low
Starring Roles For:
Dwayne Johnson

In the Vein Of:
John Wick

Posted:
06/29/2022
Updated:
05/28/2023
Author Bio:
James is the author of fifteen screenplays and three novels adapted from their original screenplays and available on Amazon. BUCK and the ANGEL, A COP’S STORY and BLOODY BUSINESS are available in the Kindle book store in digital download and paperback. James’ character, Travis Starr, returns from A Cop’s Story, retired and now a private investigator in Bloody Business. James’ screenplay, THE SHELTER, was optioned once in 2003 by Anything but Hollywood films, and again in 2006 by Ryan Harper of Your Half Pictures in Los Angeles.

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Contest Results:
Table Read (Semifinalist) [2022]
Nicholl Fellowships (Honorable Mention, Finished top 20%) [2019]
Page Turner Awards (Quarterfinalist) [2022]
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