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Have you met my sister?

When a morbidly shy Alice-in-Wonderland-type young lady finds herself dropped into an embarrassing situation, she invents an outrageous and opinionated twin, who, armed with repressed emotions and stinging sarcasm, sabotages both her dream job and her love life.

This story is inspired by my first two years in college. When I finally admitted the ruse, I was asked  “Well then, who was that other girl?”

The story centers on Samantha (20),  an extremely shy introverted young lady who still cuddles her stuffed animals and one very old guinea pig for comfort.  

She dresses professionally in the style of a matronly secretary.  Her outgoing  Best friend, Eccentric grandmother, and Conservative mother all encourage her to grow up and come out of her shell. 

Her goals are simple:  Get her dream job—a position as a paralegal in a reputable law office.

Go on a date -and as her grandmother points out—she first has to learn how to say hello when a boy says hello first.

Her first goal—getting her dream job—is accomplished rather early in the story. 

However, it is replaced by the goal of keeping her dream job after her imaginary twin, armed with repressed emotions and stinging sarcasm, sabotages both her dream job and her love life.

Her second goal? To go on a date? gets complicated.  

Samantha develops a mad crush on the Good-looking playboy in the office —-until he dubs her a boring “Alice in Wonderland.”

The Dorky law student has a crush on Samantha.  But he’s pushy and hovers and Samantha can’t stand him.

One day, Best friend drags Samantha out to shop for a cocktail dress -Every girl needs one for those office parties.  Dorky law student spies her through the shop window and comes into the lady's boutique to talk.  Samantha is mortified and pretends she doesn’t know him.  But he’s pushy and so Samantha creates Frederica, her sophisticated identical twin sister. 

Dorky law student spreads the news that Alice in Wonderland has a twin sister who is taller, thinner, sexy, smart, witty, and confident. To Samantha’s vexation, everyone wants to meet her. 

When Samantha admits she doesn’t even like her imaginary twin, her grandmother tricks her into spending a day as her imaginary twin in order to get to know her better.  As her twin, she meets a really nice guy and they really hit it off.  He invites her to accompany him to a political reception.  Her imaginary twin accepts! She’s in love!

Unfortunately, her boss informs Samantha that Samantha is required to attend the reception as well. 

Samantha is torn.  Quit her dream job?  Or quit really nice guy?  

Her grandmother and best friend, encourage her to go as both Samantha and Frederica.  They promise to aid in the deception.

After a chaotic evening of changing clothes and identities in this comedy of errors,  the ruse is uncovered by none other than the obnoxious Good-looking playboy. 

And just like in Cinderella, she makes her getaway down the stairs, loses a shoe, and tearfully returns home where she discovers that her beloved guinea pig - a symbol of her childhood - has died of old age.

Meanwhile….

Really nice guy, feeling duped, loses a bet that no one knew about the deception and so is compelled by Dorky law student to return the shoe in grand Cinderella fashion.  

Over a grave for the guinea pig, Her Boss (who knew all along)  shares that he thinks Samantha does a great job, but he wouldn’t mind a little bit more of Frederica’s panache in the office. 

Really nice guy admits that his first opinion was that Frederica was a girl with imagination (little did he know) and did she have a preference on who she would be going forward? 

It all ends happily ever after in Musical Theatre fashion: 

Really nice guy and Samantha; 

Her Boss  and Eccentric Grandmother; 

Best Friend and Dorky law student.  

Good-looking playboy hits on Conservative mother.   Hmm-a Cougar.  Conservative mother is flattered and then directs Good-looking playboy to bring in the garden tools.

And Samantha?    She’s discovered her inner strength.  Coupled with a little spunk and confidence.  Going forward?   

Just Samantha.

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After the Ball" meets “Mrs Doubtfire” 

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Posted:
04/06/2024
Updated:
04/06/2024
Author Bio:
Suzanne is an avid learner, avid reader & avid writer. Besides a voracious writer, she currently teaches middle school band and plays bass in a country band. Frequently wins at scrabble and looses at poker.

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